PPP Manifesto Feedback

From the manifesto I watched i thought everyoens was really clear and effective in portraying themselves, however when I refer this to my own I think it seems slightly lost and needs to be worked on, especially fr the end of year presentations. 

Verbal Feedback:

I was very fear on my aims and the fact that I wanted to stay in the North, however I contradicted myself when saying about San Franscico. 

The use of non-capital letters at the start of the presentations and sentence was NOT effective. It threw the balnce of the page and looked un professional.

The verbal presentation of my skills and likes was very clear

I feel that the presentation did go ok, but looking back I feel that I could of really put in more effort . I am still confused about me as a designer as I am not too sure what to settle into and what processes suit me best. Howver if i feel this stingily about the confusion, I'm not too sure why i didn't highlight that in my presentation.